Hey this is my first script,I dont know the standard format so please dont knock me on format-i know its wrong. It is a play that I am making for my drama class- please read it and tell me what you think...Thanks


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One Fifty One


Act I


Scene I: The Phone Booth

The scene opens and we see three young clean-cut Italian looking men in nice black overcoats, they are standing next to a phone booth. They are the “Monoscalco” brothers. One of them (Tony Monoscalco) Is using the telephone in the booth, behind him stands “Johnny Monoscalco” waiting impatiently, and behind him is “Charlie Monoscalco.”


Johnny Monoscalco:


Hey Tony when you gonna’ be
Done with that phone huh’?

Tony Monoscalco:


When I’m done with it come on
What’s it look like- Rent-a-Booth?

Johnny Monoscalco:


Get a load of this guy
Charlie-he thinks he’s
Marlin Brando!

Charlie Monoscalco:


Yea, except I neva’ seen Mr.
Brando chitchat for four hours!



Johnny Monoscalco


Yeah and if he did he’d be getting
Paid top dolla’

Tony Monoscalco

Hey listen you goons-I’m working
Here- if you don’t stop-I’m going to have
Break you one.

Johnny Monoscalco

Tough Tony, Really Tough, You
Like a dictator ya’ dig?

Tony Monoscalco

Yea I dig. Now scram.

Johnny Monoscalco

And you no what’s funny about dictators?
They all die horribly.

Charlie Monoscalco

Not Hitler.

Johnny Monoscalco

Listen if you call drinken’ cyanide and
Burning your self to death a happy
Ending you got some problems buddy…

Tony Monoscalco

Yea I got one…

Johnny Monoscalco

Yea? Shoot.



Tony Monoscalco

Stalin. Died of a stroke,
Now shut up so I can talk.
You’re buggin’ the crap outta’
Me with your politics.

Johnny Monoscalco

Stalin eh? Intrestrin’



Charlie’s cell phone rings and he walks stage left. The booth stationed stage right. Charlie is arguing with the person Tony sunk into the telephone booth and Johnny is flicking Tony’s ear- trying to irritate him laughing…

Johnny Monoscalco

Ah get off the phone!
C’mon, you waitin’ for my social security?
Hey Buddy! Someone’s in line! That’s right Me!

Tony Monoscalco

And your gonna’ stay there till’ I’m done!

Johnny Monoscalco

Oh, touchy-touchy boss.


We see a man from the back walk out of nowhere and point a gun at Charlie, he fires [Bang-Bang] Johnny turn’s immediately to see his brother Charlie fall limply to the ground the shooter runs away, know one sees his face. Johnny runs to his brother’s side.

(Holding his brothers head up)



Tony
Eh! Get back here you!

Tony runs after the man off stage

Johnny

Son of a’

Charlie

Is it bad? (cough) (cough)
How’s it look, Is It Bad?


Johnny

Nah… Its just blood, your fine-right?

Charlie

I dunno’ johhny Is it bad really?
I’m not going to die am I?
Not here on the street right?


Johnny

Charlie-buddy? Man your not gonna’ die
Your fine people can fix this stuff.

Charlie

Good cause I don’t want to die man,
I’ve never even read a’ book!

Johnny

Charlie listen, ya’ fine…ok?
Your gonna’ have plenty of time to
Read a book. This isn’t anything I’m
Telling ya honestly!

Charlie

But how’s it look? Tough huh?

Johnny

Yea Charlie, real tough.
Real tough.

Charlie goes limp as his eyes roll back
And he slumps back in Johnny’s arms.
Tony runs back in the scene.

Tony

Christ, what happened?

Johnny

Instead of lowly gag gin for an
Hour, how’s bout goin’ and getting some help?

Tony

He’s ok right?

Johnny

Tony- HELP!



Scene II: One Fifty One


The scene opens with a view of a table a man on one side, and two brothers on the other (Monoscalcos) The man they are opposing is a country looking man, his name is Buck Dean. The men take there seats and begin to talk…

Johnny

So how’s business been?

Buck

Good… I guess- Haven’t had any
Complaints yet!

Tony

Yeah I bet this business comes with a
Bunch of complaints!

(They all start laughing)

Buck

What about you guys? Haven’t seen
you in a while you must have been
doin’ something…

Johnny

We’ve been around…

Buck
You’ve been around?
C’mon I know you haven’t just
Been around…

Johnny

Charlie’s dead buck.

Buck

Charlie, Charlie?

Johnny

Charlie, Charlie- He got knicked by some
Guy on the streets- we didn’t even see it
Com’n

Buck

Jesus I told him not to take that job…

Johnny

Job...What job?



Buck

The one with the muse.
Ah what was his name?
Len..Leonardo?Leonard!
That’s it Leonard Leonardo

Johnny

He never told me of no Leanardo?

Buck

Ya? It was big I heard.
Surely you knew?

Johnny

No…?

Tony

I thought he had some deal
Goin’ on the side. That kid.

Buck

Well I heard some new
Curly haired fella’ I guess
Some kind of big time show boy
Offered Charlie a job.

Johnny

Yea? What kinda’ job?

Buck

No takeout or anything, I think
It was just pushin cash around,
And I guess the cash disappeared-
So naturally it was blamed on Charlie.

Johnny

No- Charlie didn’t do it. You know
Charlie buck he’s no scam.

Buck

Definitely Charlie was honest
to the book. But this new guy wouldn’t’ a
Cared. Hard I here. Real goofy looking fella.

Johnny

I can’t see why Charlie would take
A job alone?

Buck

Ahh lets get off this boys.
You know this games getting dirty,
like it use to be in 86’
Back in San Andrea’s…

Johnny

Ya those were the days… Remember that old fella’
Mikey Reinerr-

Tony

Its RAHneer not Reineer

Johnny

Anyways, I saw that guy the other day,
and you wanna talk about falling off
the band wagon… let me tell ya-

Buck

I thought he was livin’ in Tijuana?

Johnny

Keyword “was” anyway he was telling me about all these people and how they wanted to live in the states, Am I the only one that see’s something there? They live on the border! How can you look across the borda’ and say you wish you lived there?



Tony

(laughs) It’s different Johnny people there don’t have what we do here.

Johnny

No,no, don’t tell me that, if they don’t like there country they can leave, you know how many people crossed that border before them? San Jose, Sacramento, San Juan, Los Angeles… Bakers Ville…(laughs) I’m just playing I don’t know how they got there I’m just saying…

Buck

(laughing) were’s he get this stuff?

Tony

I swear he was born like that, it aint me!
(laughing)

[Tony’s cell Phone rings]

Tony

Hold on I got take this one…

[tony walks out of the room leaving johnny and buck alone]

Johnny

Oh man, I tell you him and phones…

Buck

Yea, he always like that?

Johnny

Allways.

[buck sits back and takes a drink]



Buck

Listen Johnny I got a job…
And I know Charlie and all that’s
Tragic. But this is good, real good.

Johnny

Yea? Shoot.

Buck

All right, But I’m going to tell you
Up front- I cant use two on this one.

Johnny

Cmon’ buck you know I don’t pull gig’s with out Tony…
Charlie and all bein’ dead now.

Buck

Yea I know-but this ones different,
It isn’t no boost- or pushin’ money-
Its real. Real, Real.

Johnny

What is it?

Buck

A Takedown.

Johnny

A takedown eh? Dirty Vegas style.
I don’t like takedowns. Unless the
Price is right.

Buck

I figured the ole businessman in you.
I said its big- One Hundred and Fifty One Thousand dollars.



Johnny

Hundred and fifty one g’s huh?
That’s big all right. Who’s the
Lucky one?

Buck

10 years of business and
You still think you gonna’ squeeze
a name?


Johnny

Yea. Thought maybe it’d slip
This time. Huh- that’s a lot.
I could use some dough. All right
I’ll do it.

Buck

Pleasures mine.


At this time we see Tony enter stage again.
Closing his cellphone and he takes his seat
At the table.

Johnny

Who was it?

Tony

I don’t know some
Terrance guy say’s he knew us
In school or something- went all
Haywire on me with questions.

Buck

You two.



Johnny

I got another joke for ya’.
There was a man making a brick
Wall for an old lady right?
Well he’s making this wall as if its some
Kinda’ modern art piece. When he’s finally finished
He looks down and notices he ONE brick left.
He is amazed- I mean this is the world best
Brick mason, and he has a brick left!
So he looks over at the elder lady
And says “well what should I do with this last brick?”
So she say’s “well I don’t know, throw it up in the air”
He has no better idea so sure enough he throws that
Brick in the air so high it never comes down.

(Silence for a moment)

Tony

Is that it? That ya joke?

Buck

Only you Johnny tell ‘a joke
With no punchline.

Tony

But wait is that it?
That’s the whole joke?

Johnny

Well yea. Naturally…


All of a sudden Johnny’s cell phone rings.

Johnny

Be a minute, ok?

Buck

All the time you need pal.

Johnny Un-flips his cell phone and walks off
Stage leaving Buck and Tony at the table.

Tony

So honestly buck how’s the ole business?
Your top game I know you got some kind of
Work.

Buck

Actually It has been real slow,
Until just recently I got this
Gig.

Tony

A gig eh? Lets here it
Im interested.

Buck

Thought you would be.
Well a personal friend of mine
Is having some personal problems with
a personal Friend of his. He offered
me some dough to take care of
this personal problem.

Tony

And you want me in?

Buck

Of course- long time buddies why not?
But, I can’t use two- you see that causes
Confusion, which leads a lead to me. So Johnny
Has to be kept in the dark.

Tony

My word is yours-
Whats my cut?



Buck

Every cent of
151 grand. You see
the only reason I took the job
is because it keeps my business running with him
like a favor. So long as I keep him in
business he keeps me in business.

Tony

This aint’ gonna’ come back
On me buck?

Buck

Good friends right?

Tony

All right I’m in.


Just then Johnny enters the stage again,
Putting away his cell phone he takes his seat.

Buck

Everything ok?

Johnny

Yea. Yea. Some whack
Job said I screwed over his
Order on the inks. Which
Is crazy cause I haven’t done
Inks since San Andreas!

Tony

Some quacks I tell ya’

Johnny

Yea. So where were we?

Buck

Who knows now?

Tony

Regular riot, you.

Johnny

Oh well- I got another joke.

Tony

Oh boy- here we go.

Johnny

Ok theres this man and a lady on
A plan right, well the man he’s smokin’
A big fat cubin. Smokes goin everywhere
And the lady looks over at him and say’s
“Do you mind? I have a little dog here, goin crazy”
he looks at her and says “Well uh, I paid for
ticket just as well as you did. Im going to keep smoking”
So they go on about there business. A little while later
“Excuse me sir my dog is going crazy and I have allergies please put your cigar out?” He replies “ Well ill tell you what lady I throw my cigar out if you throw your dog out?”
She thinks about it and says,”Well allright Fair enough my allergies are killing me.” So he throws out his cigar and
She throws her dog out. A little while later Kind of feeling sad about her
Dog she looks outside the window and guess what she sees in
That dang dogs mouth?

Tony

What the mans cigar?

Johnny

Nah, a Brick!

They all begin to laugh hysterically.



Buck

Ah- that’s funny stuff.
You know you two crack me up.


Out of no where buck ask a key
Question.

Buck

Hey ive been meanin to ask ya
Were ya got that watch from tony?

Tony

This ah some family valuable I guess.
One of a kind eh?

Buck

Yea I’d say...


Scene III: Showdown at the phone booth

NARRATOR: After contemplating whether
or not to do the job
For buck, Johnny final encourages
him self to go takeout Unknown. When he gets there a man is already waiting there,
Dressed almost exactly the same as
Johnny: A business suit, with a nylon mask.


We see a man profile view waiting for someone else
Centered stage. Shorlty after a man dressed exactly like
Him walks fastly up two him pulling out revolver.
The man sees him and pull out his revolver they are now
Opposing each other gun point center stage. These two men
Unknowingly are Tony and Johnny

Johnny

Put the gun down pal.

Tony

Hey buddy newsflash- we both got
Guns.

Johnny

You’re a funny one eh?

Tony

When I have to be,
Listen your gonna die
Either way.

Johnny

That’s were you wrong
Buddy boy your gonna die
No me!

Tony

Oh yea who says?
Who says I don’t plug
Yea right now?

Johnny

Havent done it yet?
I think you want to listen
And that’s the diffrence pal-
I don’t got time to listen.

Tony

So were getting tough eh?
You wanna make jokes
Then joke. I’m here to do
A job, are ya done? Cause I want to
Get this over with

Johnny

Oh so now you think your Marlin Brando eh?



Tony

Marlin Brando? Whats with that guy
My brother always talks about marlin
Brando.

Johnny

Hey say were did you get that watch?

Tony

Family valuable, whats it make to you?

Johnny

Tony?

Johnny pulls his mask of and Tony soon pulls
His off realizing they’ve been set up.

Tony

What are ya’ doin here Johnny?

Johnny

What are you doin here?

Tony

A Job I Thought.

Johnny

Christ. We were set up!

Suddenly a man walks out from the right of the stage,
We never see his face, but we can tell its buck from
How he is dressed in his country style suit.


BUCK (DISGUISED)

Ah cmon on boys don’t you see
The big picture? It all fits?


Johnny

Christ sakes I knew this would
Come back on me.

Tony

I don’t get it? Why would
You set us up?

Buck

Hah your ignorance is finally
Showing. Why would I set you up?
The question of the day it seems?
Why? Just why would I set you up?
Hmm… Power maybe? Control? Maybe
That’s the missing piece to the
Puzzle? Maybe you thought that I
Would sit there and let you to run
Every job your way on your time?
But that’s not how I saw it. You see
It would seem that there are two
Types of people in this game, the
Gun runners-you two, and the stool
Seaters-me. Now this means nothing to
You because you like most humans you look
At things in whole. Not in truth. But
What realy matters? Is it the actual
Job you do? Or is it the purpose?
Or maybe even the incentive? But its
Never the truth- the gun runners
Are supposed to be on the bottom of
The game, the one who does the dirty
Work. And the stool seater sits in
And office smoking a cubin allday
Gaining money for something he hasn’t
Laid his clammy hand in. Now it seems
The stool seater has power in this
Scenario. So it seems atleast,
But is that realy the truth? No it
Isn’t you see the boss isn’t really
The boss, the boss is actually
In truth just a collector, while
The boss is receiving money-

- he inst getting the respect the
gun runners do. So all in all
the gun runners are actually
the boss of the boss, and I cant
have that boys. That leads to
conflict, which leads to loss of
money which ultimately leads
to a loss of power. And you no
me I like power

Johnny

If you don’t get
That stinkin gun out
Of my face I will put
A whole so big in your
Forehead that youll be
Able to breathe out of it!

Buck

Temper. Temper, Why so
Harsh with the words
Friend? You act like
One of your friends killed
Your brother?

Tony

You sick son of a!

Johnny

He didn’t do it!


Buck

I didn’t? What makes you
So shure buddy o pal?

Johnny

You wouldn’t have the
Guts to kill Charlie.
You know inside somewhere
- In your heart. If you have
One, you couldn’t do it.
Lets face it buck- your
A coward. You don’t even
Know your own friends.
You talk of ignorance,
And power, but in
Reality you’re confusing
Ignorance with your arrogance.
Whether I die today or not,
It wont hide your cowardness.
Killing solves nothing,
But I guess you haven’t
Learned that yet. So shoot
Me if you will- but I guarantee
To gods forsaken soul the
Second you pull that trigga’
Blood will spill from
Ya’ heart.

Tony

C’mon buck just put
The gun down! Take your
Stinkin power!

Buck

Thanks for the offer
Pal but I rather see you two dead.



It isnt finished yet but tell me if its even worth finishing?

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