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im watching and reviewing at the same time...
alright the beginning interruptions of black seem too long, this of course is my opinion...
maybe shorten it up...
the camera is moving too much, even if you were doing it for effect, it is coming off as amateurish...again, my opinion...
i'm NOT saying you need to keep the cam on a tripod, but def. keep it steady...
i think you could have done a better job on the angling...maybe have the camera higher up with the girl, when filming down on the guy, and vice versa...down low looking up at the girl...
this would add emphasis to the girl, since she is mad, and is striking down on him...it would make him inferior, if you did an angling to that effect...when you are getting the shots of the girl you are standing at the same level, and maybe just a little alteration, maybe just a little higher or lower, would make it look all the better...
again, camera is shaking, and is revealing too much head room...
what ever happened to different framing... there should be some medium-closeups at least..
so far thats what seems to be the problem, framing and angling...
ALSO...a VERY basic cinematography tip....
if you film over say the girls left shoulder from up high, you should film over the guys right shoulder from down low...
that would have made your film all the better...
alright im at 2:50secs of the movie...and you just need to work on your cinematography, i mean to be honest, this looks like a home video of America's Most Pathetic Break-ups on Video...or something...

work on your skill...hone your craft...make something 10 times better for your next film...

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J.MICHAEL | FILMS ABROAD ©

i would have to agree with j here, he sums it up well. this is better, by a long shot, than your other work. but i feel when watching it that the camera movement is unmotivated and highly distracting. also the shot variety tends to be all medium shots like he said, if this was for effect it didnt look like it. just plan out your shots better maybe? i dunno some weak framing all over, it distracts from the story. the tone and editing are better than previous work. maybe a little more explanation of why those people were busting his ass up, without having read the homepage for this short, i would have had no idea they were drug dealers, aside from maybe a cliche kinda generic assumption. also the relation between the struggle with the dealers and his girlfriend is a little loose, not parallel or contrasting just kinda there. even if you are trying to leave a portion of it to the imagination of the viewer, it still has holes which make it disconcerting. at least its better than barely illegal, sorry boys but that one was pretty bad

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