This is my short film base on my poem.
I hope you can comment on this.
私の創作した詩を元にしたショートフィルムです。
よかったらコメントください。

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HCaqq3OXHlw

First time I've seen someone else from Japan here.

I thought the actual poem was very beautiful (though there were a couple grammatic errors in the english side), but as far as the rest of film goes, I found it repetetive and frankly a little dull. The opening sequence that preceded the poem was unnecessary, and took away from the piece more than it added. I would replace it with a couple of establishing/wide shots of the girl drawing、and just really focus on the poem.

Poem:　金賞
Film:　がんばりま賞