About a guy who wants to buy a secondhand xbox360 from somebody

xbox sketch

what do you think?

A lot of your shots are nicely framed...however a lot of the cuts in between those shots are not very natural and kind of distance the viewer. The timing and types of cuts you use are kind of distracting. This same lack of continuity is present in your soundtrack as well.
It seems like you have an eye for good shots, but I would strongly suggest working on how to string a series of shots together smoothly and efficiently. I struggle with this same problem a bit too...

Thanks for your reply. I'm training myself with this and comments like this can help me for future projects.