Ok so i wrote this up real quick, and i'm liking it more and more. I know the format isn't quite right, and there might be some weird stuff cuz' its taken from email, but here's my script. On the off chance that anyone from atlanta reads this loves this and would like to act in it e mail me.

INT. NIGHT
> >Bedroom in a dark night with bright moonlight streaming in and hitting
>the
> >bed.
> >BARRY is lying in bed, face up asleep. All of the sudden, Barry opens his
> >eyes, pauses, and sits up as if in a panic.
> >INT. NIGHT
> >Dark bedroom door.
> >The door opnes a crack, it is too dark on the other side to see anything.
> >INT. NIGHT
> >(WHISPER) BARRY
> >“NO”
> >Barry, scrables off the bed and hides in a corner or behind a piece of
> >furniture in the room.
> >INT. NIGHT
> >Black boots walk across the threshold into the room, and walk across it.
> >They pass BARRY’s postion, he is visible. Then, barry bursts out and runs
> >from the room, slamming the door behind him.
> >INT.
> >Brightly lit, small sparse room (mental institute room).
> >BARRY is running in circles in a seemingly random pattern, pulling on his
> >hair and acting mad, breathing deeply and seeming scared. He is alone.
> >INT.
> >Basic hallway, full body of DOCTOR in white coating standing and starring
> >into something off camera.
> >INT.
> >Non descriptive hallway stands the doctor dressed in white robe. Close up
> >face shot, DOCTOR staring slightly to the left of the camera.
> >DOCTOR (TO HIMSELF)
> >“What are you doing Barry. I’ve never seem this before. Where are we
>going
> >with this.”
> >INT. NIGHT
> >In the dark house, barry is frantically running down stairs, breathing
> >deeply and terrified.
> >INT. NIGHT
> >On same stairway, camera is placed at landing. Black boots come into view
> >at
> >the uppermost visible step, and then the character continues to walk
>down,
> >revealing black pants, black belt and the bottom of a black shirt before
> >passing the camera and going out of view.
> >INT. NIGHT
> >BARRY runs into a kitchen and slumps against a cabinet and sinks to the
> >floor.
> >INT. NIGHT
> >The MAN IN ALL BLACK enters the room, but his face is to deeply shadowed
>to
> >see, he walks over to BARRY.
> >INT.
> >In mental cell, BARRY is slumped against the wall
> >BARRY (PLEADING)
> >“Please, don’t do it, please.”
> >INT.
> >In the nondescript hallway. Medium shot of DOCTOR’s face.
> >DOCTOR
> >“Here comes the finally Barry, what’s it going to be this time?”
> >INT.
> >In medical room. Barry sweating, terrified.
> >BARRY
> >“Please, No”
> >INT. NIGHT
> >At the house, in the kitchen. Close up of the almost entirely shadowed
> >face.
> >MAN
> >“No Barry, its time for you to pay up on the debt.”
> >INT. NIGHT
> >Point of View shot from Barry, as black gloved hand draws a gun from
>within
> >his jacket and points it at Barry, filling almost the entire shot.
> >INT.
> >In medical room. Barry is in same slump when all sudden there is a bullet
> >wound on his chest.
> >INT.
> >Basic hallway, medium shot of the doctor.
> >(TERRIFIED WHISPER) DOCTER
> >“No”
> >Doctor bolts down the hall.
> >THE END

Sounds like a Dead Zone episode.

-Why is he in a mental hospital?

Here's what I get.

There's a guy in a hospital who has the ability to relive a story (his story or possibley someone else's) during this perticular story he is shot in the "flashback" thing and expierences the wound in real life...

I would need more of an explination.

- C. Davis
YELLOW HAMMER PRODUCTIONS

wow, that was kinda some nice priase. Anyways, thats not exaclty what i was intending when i made the script, but i've shown it to a few people and no-one has gotten exactly the same thing out of it. I don't really want to explain it now. I intend to make the movie some time in the future, and then see what people think. Maybe make a little director's comentary so i can say what i get out of it... thanks for the reviewish thing

What I got out of it is that the power of the mind is unmatchable. Barry was so scared and so deep in believing what was happening that his brain caused his body to think it was there too. I loved it can't wait to see it very good idea!

My first film on this sight "Decisions" had everyone telling me how a story is "SUPPOSSED TO BE TOLD" in my opinion only the story teller can tell you that. In the future I hope to appeal to more people, however I refuse to do a film the way it's "suppossed to be told"

Don't be like that Mike.

I watched your film and I had already seen it, but I watched it again.

I had already reviewed it but I just want you to know that I'm not telling you how to tell a story.

You "told" it just fine, but why tell? We can read those words. Your images weren't half as poetic and artfilled as your V.O.

This is a problem because it's not using the film (video) as the substance.

Also, I didn't hear any sound track... Maybe the VO covered it, I don't know. Anyway.

Your way is your way. If you want people to watch your stuff, don't have a V.O. that wordy again. I'm sure some - few - people like that style and if that's all you want to appeal to, then more power to you.

I personally hate poetry (I'm in poetry writing). That and media writing are two of the dumbest classes I've ever been forced to take - but I digress.

Anyway. Just make movie you outlooks will change. Mine have. I'm not as thickskulled as I seem. Okay I am but F*ck 'em!

- C. Davis
YELLOW HAMMER PRODUCTIONS

[This message was edited by ACF President on August 25, 2003 at 05:47 PM.]

Hey AFC that wasnt directed at you that is my signature. I appreciate the honesty of how you rated my film I just am stubborn and dont want anyone to change their student film jus because its not what most people like. I knew when I made my film it was only going to appeal to a small audience, but since this was a film I made for class and not for money i took the risk of making it anyway. Expirimenting is the best way to learn. However none of this was releavent to this topic I think everyone has diffrent views and ideas of what this young mans film is about and i was commenting on that, but I think my signature confused you. So no hard feelings I hope I appreciate all the feedback I receive from people even the negative stuff because thats how we learn. I hope I cleared that up cuz i got nothing but love for you man... you and everyone here and I hate when people argue on these boards lol.

The only right way to tell a story is the way the director see's it... there is never a wrong way

LoL heh, oops!

- C. Davis
YELLOW HAMMER PRODUCTIONS