Ok, I have to write a screenplay for my film program and the theme is "keeping a secret." The maximum legnth is 2 minutes. I am just wondering if anyone has any suggestions where I could get started...

I had this idea of like this guy and it just follows him throuout his daily routine as he recites a monologue like: "I wake up, I got to work.." kinda thing, it shows him riding the bus reading like a news paper about like some missing girls or soemtihng like normal people do and we all think he's just a regular guy until he gets home and yells "Hi honeeeeeeeeeeey!" as he opens the bedroom door its like a girl all tied up to a chair with a gag ball in her mouth and like he's like a ****ed up guy or something... I dunno, It's what I came up with running on 4 hours of sleep for the past 2 days... It's a pretty easy plot to guess but I dunno can anyone help perhpas with this idea or a whole new other idea...? I'll be up all night forsure tonight tihnking of ideas. my email is

poplarparkfilms@hotmail.com, drop me a line or something if you have any comments and ill check back here too.

thanks people

James

come on!!!

a boy is sitting on a lonely bench waiting for his bus, and he has a bulky bandage wrapped around his knee. A small group of bigger boys notice the bandage and start asking him about it and making fun of him. They hold him down and rip off the bandage to find that the boy has an semi-developed mouth on his knee-cap. So the bullies start poking the knee-mouth with tree branches and other objects and they try to get the boy to tell them why he has a mouth there, but the boy will never tell because its a secret.
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thats retarded man, I don't know if you're joking or not (i hope you are)

how about there is a young kid in school, and everyone came back from winter holiday and is takling about the things they got for christmas, but the one poor kid tries to keep it a secret that he got nothing for christmas despite it being obvious to his teacher.

yo thats a pretty good idea. i like it, what u tihnk of like my idea that i wrote about above?

for a 2 minute short it is a pretty cool idea...maybe a little cliche...my main issue with it is that i dont get how he is keeping a secret really...it doesn't seem to involve very much tension regarding the fact that he has a secret, rather it has more to do with what his secret is.

yeah but he's keeping the secret from the viewers, its like he's saying his monologue and he's hinting towards something perhpas then we find out at the end kinda thing

most films tell secrets about the filmmakers there to get a bill cause they have addictions (clothes, big houses, ect)

but yours reminds me of people like

you sickos

man I don't understand what you're trying to say man? Does what kyle said make sense to anyone???

Well I told Kyle to get you on the right path, but he only had a short amount of time to leave a message.

alright....?

basically just watch the main bolster on my page....its about violence...and I used to like violence in movies when i was younger. what have i become?

yo i know what you mean but I havn't done anything like this kinda thing before and most people here at school are making comedies as of late so i wanted to shock em with a hardcore violent ****.

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Originally posted by Poplar Park Films:
most people here at school are making comedies as of late so i wanted to shock em with a hardcore violent ****.

Yeah thats the problem...today's generation is so exposed and so callous that it takes so much to even move them a little bit, let alone get them completely engaged and sympathetic. Imagine the first time an scene of someone dying was filmed...the audience must've been gripping their sits in absolute shock. Nowadays, the average person sees thousands of simulated deaths before they are even a teenager. So now people try way to hard to be out there and shock people, which was kind of what I was mildly satirizing in my first post.

alright man, what do you suggest? some kinda sappy love story? sh it, everything been done in film already... i got up to two minutes to show the audeince a story about keeping a secret... what can i do???

you have a girlfriend...you have a dream with her and she's doing a donkey with a strap on...you tell her and she is upset...she tells you you shouldnt tell anyone about this dream...but it wasnt really her in the dream...since it was really a dream of you dreaming of yourself (as yourgirlfriend) doing yourself (as a donkey)

One of the first scenes that comes to mind is a guy having all of his inward subconscious thoughts broadcast by an announcer in 1920's radio drama style to strange families that are gathered around listening to their radios by the fireside in their homes in similar 1920's fashion. So the broadcaster is announcing publicly all of this guys thoughts, and then the broadcaster starts stumbling across some private info, and the guy tries so hard to keep him out of his mind so the announcer starts stuttering and can't finish senetences and his voice distorts and eventually becomes reduced to a series of incoherent noises and the strange families are confused

man shut the f*ck up. sounds like your favorite scene from clerks 2. you're useless man. I'm tryin to get perhaps some aid on here and you're just leavin' me out to dry? come on dude your Kyle JOHNSON!! THE KYLE JOHNSON!!!

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Originally posted by braininabox:
One of the first scenes that comes to mind is a guy having all of his inward subconscious thoughts broadcast by an announcer in 1920's radio drama style to strange families that are gathered around listening to their radios by the fireside in their homes in similar 1920's fashion. So the broadcaster is announcing publicly all of this guys thoughts, and then the broadcaster starts stumbling across some private info, and the guy tries so hard to keep him out of his mind so the announcer starts stuttering and can't finish senetences and his voice distorts and eventually becomes reduced to a series of incoherent noises and the strange families are confused

yo thats getting somewhere..