A retired photographer and ex-seducer takes pictures of women from his apartment window in order to relive his past and fantasies. He rates every woman he photographs on a scale from 1 to 10. His goal: Find the number 10. He finds it. She lives in the apartment across the street. Through his dreams, we see him living with her. One night, he notices strange visitors in dark suits in her apartment. In his fantasies, he fights them off of his number 10. The next day, he receives a visit from an inspector of police responding to complaints from one of the photographer's former "victims". The photographer denies everything. The inspector warns our hero that he knows darn well what he's doing and threatens to turn him in if he continues. He informs the photographer that the woman he's been staring at(#10) is the girlfriend of some mobster the feds have been after for a long time. Inspector offers to let him loose if he should help them gather information on the woman in question's relations with the mobster. Photographer rejects the offer. The next night, photographer watches his number 10(as usual) when he suddenly notices one of the suspicious looking guys, from before, on the floor below, screwing a silencer on top of a gun. A hitman!?! Photographer panics, runs down the stairs of his apartment, cross the street, up the stairs, into number 10's apartment where he defeats the hitman in one dramatic take. Our two heroes in arms. Dramatic Music. #10 moves away from him. She asks "Do I know you?" Cut immediately to CU of photographer. The scene has "faded" from dream to reality. His head is blown off by hitman. Cut to black screen, a woman's screams, more gunshots. The End.

Any suggestions on how to develop this crazy idea, let me know.

Pitch: Think "Rear Window" meets "Brazil" with a touch of "10" for good measure.

Er... I dunno. Its got a good twist with the mob connection; but the whole thing feels like the it needs a small dose of reality. The coincidence that he lives across the street from "#10" is a little lame; and a few other things bothered me that I can't quite put my finger on. Maybe you're more familiar with the idea, and you can. But then again, I don't think they bother you, so....

I sorta liked the "rear window" effect of it, but u totally lost it with the mob guy. it just seems to off and obsured. it kinda was like "what should we happen.. umm just throw the mob in there". maybe just make a jelous boyfriend, i mean, thats more believeable. the mob is such an amateur appraoch. the simple boyfriend seems a little more acceptable, and ur able to suspend disbalief more.

Good comments, Alex. Maybe an abusive boyfriend? He sees the bf and girl get in a "disagreement" and the bf grabs/slaps/abuses the girl in some way.

Then rear-window-man daydreams about saving her from the bf and gets it.

Just thinking out loud! Good luck.

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Originally posted by Mark M:
Good comments, Alex. Maybe an abusive boyfriend? He sees the bf and girl get in a "disagreement" and the bf grabs/slaps/abuses the girl in some way.

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The plot is already too similar to "Rear Window" to throw in an abusive boyfriend.

I personally think its just a dreadful, simply dreadful idea, but I am not one to just cut you up and leave it at that, so my advice, as I offer it up regardless whether you will have it or not. First, as already mentioned, quite the rip-off plot. Two unless you got Hitch**** in your back pocket ready to direct this wild film is gonna be tough to make so that it does not suck. Three, wtf is with the number 10 thing, why is he rating girls through pictures, and if he is doing this, why is this cracker our hero, I don’t want any help form him. Four, what’s with the mob, why not just through in some pirates and flying monkeys.
So first things first, does he have to be a photographer spying, maybe something less hilarious. I don’t like this number system, its all to ridiculous, I think if I was watching it I might just break out laughing, so maybe something less silly will due. Also, how is this guy our hero if he is a creep spying on women? Maybe make him the villain, you don’t see to many movies where the whole film is based around the bad guy. And if your gonna have the mob in the movie, create a reason for it, don’t just through it in cause you think its badass. K THX.

Thank you for all your comments. I do agree this idea is a little weak but I never said I was gonna shoot it(at least not anytime soon), it was only an idea. Anyway, I've decided to drop the mob plot. To answer Kyle, I never wanted the photographer to be the hero(guess it wasn't clear enough). I've been thinking of writing this character as some kind of "paparazzi" who takes pictures for money, yet his deliveries are always late. I also think he should separated and waiting for a divorce from his wife so as to heighton the tension a little bit. In a way he may be taking pictures as a means to escape/forget his wife(like alcohol). And to heighton the tension a little more(tell me if I'm going too far) add preassure from his employer(s). I'm thinking of giving this information through telephone conversations or maybe an answering machine. Let me know if any of you come up with anything better. Final modification so far, instead of having #10 unaware of being watched, she is and complains(personally or to someone i.e. cops). I'm thinking of opening the film by pulling back from a camera lens to see the protagonist in the background(of the apartment) arguing with a policeman(sent up in response to complaints.

If any of this doesn't make any sense to you or you have any more suggestions, don't hesitate.

Thanks again

I love that.... hahahah the way hitchcock is censored... hahahaha!

About the idea... very close to rear window, but workable. I think, it would be better if he was at a park or something and pretending to photograph birds or plants, but secretly watching the ladies. Then he could follow #10 home and become obsessed with her. He could see the mobster/boyfriend in the park with her and they are fighting, and then when he is spying on her the guy shows up. I think that would take away the rear window aspect... just my two cents tho.