This script is still very rough. I want to know if the idea has any potential.

Your comments and suggestions are always appreciated. Thankyou.

Fade In
Int. Exam Room-Day
The room is bare except student and teacher’s desk. The professor sits at the desk in front of the student busy finishing off an exam.

Two other students wait their turn. One is seated at a chair going over his textbook. The other, standing, doesn’t appear to have a textbook.

He is obviously next in line. He is unprepared.

A clock ticks.

PROFESSOR
(looking at his watch)
5 minutes, you don’t have much longer.

The student taking the test speeds up his writing pace.

The unprepared student, ARTHUR, looks up at the clock over to the student skim-reading through his textbook over to the professor waiting patiently for his student to finish the exam.

PROFESSOR
(smiling)
30 seconds
Tick, Tick

ARTHUR’S eyes

PROFESSOR
15 seconds
Tick, Tick, Tick

PROFESSOR
TOPS! Time is up.

ARTHUR faints.

Fade Out

Fade In
Int. Classroom-Day
ARTHUR wakes up, from what was obviously a dream, at his work desk.
He is a little buzzed by what he dreamt.

A teacher stands at a blackboard explaining some complicated formula. His voice is muted. We hear ticking.

ARTHUR leans on his arm. He looks tired.

He looks over his shoulder at a girl in the row behind him.

She fidgets with a pencil, unaware(in appearance)of being watched.

ARTHUR smiles dreamily, sighs, looks back to the blackboard.

Unable to concentrate, he looks in direction of the window.

From the window, we see a stone bench and tree in blossom.

ARTHUR looks back at the blackboard, still can’t concentrate. He begins to sweat.

He looks over to the girl again.

She has the pencil between her teeth, sound of scraping metal.

A gulp from ARTHUR

Sweat dripping down

A fist snaps the pencil in two.

Expression of shock, disappointment on ARTHUR’S face

He looks away, depressed.

TEACHER furiously writes a series of equations.

ARTHUR can’t keep up. He holds his breath, turns blue and passes out, collapsing to the floor.

Fade Out

Fade In
Int. Empty Room

Fade to ARTHUR’S POV lying on an operating table in the center of the room.

To the right, we see a woman, MOTHER, sitting on chair weeping.

MOTHER
(to herself)
He just doesn’t care...he just doesn’t care

To the left, we see a well dressed man, Father, standing over us ashamed.

FATHER
(to himself)
Clip his wrings...cut down the budget

ARTHUR squints.

Both ARTHU’S MOTHER and FATHER are looking directly at us.

MOTHER
(cont’d)
I want some answers

FATHER
(cont’d)
Do you realize-

MOTHER
(cont’d)
What are you going-

FATHER
(cont’d)
-how serious-

MOTHER
(cont’d)
to do about it?

FATHER
(cont’d)
-this is-



MOTHER
(cont’d)
SPEAK UP!

FATHER
(cont’d)
ARTHUR!

ARTHUR tries to speak but can’t.

CUT TO:
WATER

ARTHUR falls with a silent splash.

CUT TO:
Underwater CU of ARTHUR’S face

A hand pulls him out of what now appears to be a bathtub.

CUT TO:
Int. Hospital

ARTHUR, wrapped in a blanket, sits on a stretcher. A hand rests on his shoulder.

VOICE
(O.S.;warm)
You okay?

A nod from ARTHUR

VOICE
What happened?

ARTHUR
(choking)
Bluhdgh...Bladgh...grghragh
CUT TO:
FLASHBACK
Int. Empty Room -CU of MOTHER

MOTHER
Do you understand?!
You Don’t?!?
Do you!?!

CUT TO:
Int. Hospital

ARTHUR chokes up tears.

VOICE
(O.S.)
You okay Arthur?
Arthur?
CUT TO:
Int. Room-Day

Similar room as before but furnished with bookshelves and sink in the corner. The atmosphere is very stark.

Arthur is lying on a couch.

PROFESSOR
Arthur you okay?

ARTHUR wakes up confused.

ARTHUR
Where am I?

PROFESSOR
You passed out. We brought you in here.
Your parents have been notified.
We were worried about you?
Care to explain?

ARTHUR
I...failed..the test.

PROFESSOR
What test?

ARTHUR
The Test of Willingness...I failed.

PROFESSOR
Don’t get up. Try to relax.
You, obviously, been through a lot of stress lately.

ARTHUR
But the test-

PROFESSOR
Try not to think about it.
I’m sure we’ll work something out.
No reason you can’t.

ARTHUR
Yeah, sure...sure

Fade Out

THE END

This message has been edited. Last edited by: ralphnj,

Anyone out there? please comment on this script if you have time. I would really like to know if this idea could work.

I could really use some feedback here. Thanks.

you obviously have a begining...

I really dont see a middle or end though.
why does he keep passing out? is he on drugs?
whats up with the professor?

I think this could be used as a good intro, attention grabbing. Try to work more story into it.