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This message has been edited. Last edited by: A_Film_by_Ryan_Cole,

instead of them talking, why not show them in these surreal ideas they are talking about

I agree. True, this would work as maybe a short story or a play, but not as a screenplay.

A screenplay requires is a VISUAL art form, that needs VISUAL storytelling to balance the talking. In addition, the Plane and Harold say too many obvious things and give away too much information, rather than showing the implications and leaving subtext to define what's going on.

It reads fine in some parts, but it seems like a monotanous conversation that goes on forever, all while the Plane is crashing. Other than a slight mention before hand, it seems that the tension that should build with the plane crashing ceses to exist.

Just my thought.