hey,
ok, so basicly i want to write a script,it's my first so am in need of some help.
basicly, it's about two girls and the problems and experiances they face when growing up. one girl is an 'outcast' she has a few friends and is generaly happy but has always wanted more from life and in some was evnys the popular people.
The other girl is that popular one and althoght on the outside appears happy and satestfied has always wondered what it would be like to go against the crowd and do something that would be forfiling.
the story goes about seeing how the two girls react in diffrent situasions, under pear pressure and making disisions. the two girls' story come together when a life altering event(unsure of what it would be) had them meet for the first time as equals and they reilses there pretensal and similarites. closing the gap between there ever changing lives ad making them understand eash other and excepting eash other for who they are.

i don't want the script to be chilche and by no means a happy ever after.i want it to be quite dark and very emotional .i was thinking the event could be a death of somone they both no or admire or somthing.
i was just hopeing to get some feed back.be as critical as you like i want to hear it how it is.i know it's not prefect but where can i change it.

thanks for your help
(sorry i can't spell)

It certainly has some potential here,character development during the film is crucial,however, so you need to make sure the audience feels connected to the characters.One idea I thought of was that the normal girl resents the popular type,she hates the way they act and their lifestyles,And somehow the popular girl is humbled in some way to where she is more appreciative of what she has,I don't know I'm mumbling to my self now lol.Just keep working on it,you'll know when the script is just right.

thanks, koyote
it's really interseting to get someone elses opinion. i liked what you sugested.
i'm still open to other comments
unique_redhead

Generally a movie with this set-up follows the story in which the two opposites teach each other how to be like the other, either indirectly, or on purpose (generally VERY corny).

That's total cliche, but when done correctly, and extremely subtly, without the audience or the characters aware it is happening, it could work very well.

The idea is solid but i think worn. 'Outsider looking in, insider looking out bit' it is kind of a used idea, but depending on how this is written it could have impact. If i was writing this script i'd try to set up the scenes so they are very personal, and like you said very dark. I think it's a cool basis and i'd like to help you more with ideas if you want.

Here's another cliché for you:

Make it dogs instead of girls, possibly animated, and you got yourself a children's movie...

Now that's a genre we don't see often in student films!

E.

p.s.: on a second though, you could make it about an apple and an orange... it would give the phrase "pear pressure" a whole new meaning!

that sounds a lot like the idea i just had. Id like to see how you pull it off. My problem is finding the good actors the portray these deep roles. All the power to you if you have good actors. Do you have a film on this site already?>

thanks for your comments and everything it's been really helpful and i mean who needs to worry about casting when the main characters are apples,lol thank E.D.M. to answer darko667 this is the first thing i've really ever done so know, know movies on this site or anyother for that matter,p.s like your signture

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who needs to worry about casting when the main characters are apples

Please... you mean you would take just any apple to play the main character?
You'd still need to cast your fruit... And if any of them gives you an attitude, you can just eat it!
Though it's not unheard of: casting directors eating the candidates... well, sort of.

E.

I heard Peter Jackson ate one of the original hobbits.