FADE IN “THURSDAY”
(CLOSE UP) on girl drinking coffee on a windowsill overlooking a big city. Almost night.
Telephone rings
JEN
Hello
Sound of man’s voice on other end of phone
MARK
Hey Jen, I am not sure I can make it home in time for dinner.
JEN
Oh..(pause) this is the second time this week.
MARK
I know I am really sorry(Pause) I will try to get home before you go to sleep.(Pause) I have to go now.
JEN
I love you.
Phone hangs up
FADE TO:MARK HANGING UP PHONE CLOSE UP ON PHONE
OFFICE SETTING MARK IN SUIT NEAR THE PHONE HE STANDS UP AND PUTS ON HIS JACKET.(FOLLOW WITH MEDIAN SHOT) MARK EXITS ROOM TOWARDS CAMERA.
CUT TO:JOHN IN OFFICE RECEPTION
MOMENTS LATER MARK ENTERS FROM OFFICE DOOR
JOHN
Are you ready?
MARK
Lets go.
BACK TO:JEN AT HOME
PUTTING ON THE KETTLE AND TAKING OUT A TEA BAG.
She picks up phone dials. Here Distant Phone ring.
JANETTE
Hello?
JEN
Hey mom
JANETTE
Hello honey. How are you?
JEN
I worried mom. I don't know how to say this.
JANETTE
Say what Jen? What’s wrong? What happened?
JEN
It’s Mark. He promised me yesterday that he would be home tonight for dinner. I just got off the phone with him and he said he would not be able to make it home in time. This is the second time he has called me to tell me he can’t make it home this week.
JANETTE
Its odd you mention this because your father has not been around much lately and he stay’s out late nights and I am worried about him as well. But don't you worry I am sure Mark just has to work late that's all. Mark is a good man Jen.
JEN
I know he is, it’s just that on Monday he came home so late that when he got in to bed he just fell asleep and was gone when I woke up in the morning.
JANETTE
He is a important man Jen. I wish your father would come home soon. I need to speak to him.
JEN
It’s our one year on Friday.
JANETTE
What do you have planed?
JEN
I am not even sure. When I asked Mark what his schedule is like for Friday he said he will get back to me. I tried calling him today to ask him about it and his secretary Cheryl said he was not in and asked me if I could take a message.(Mock voice.)
JANETTE
Jen I think you might be overreacting.
Kettle starts whistling
JEN
I got to go mom. I will call you tomorrow.
Jen walks over to stove turn’s off heat and pours tea. Turns towards the camera with back to stove and ponders with tea in hand.
Phone rings and scares Jen. Mug falls,Jen starts to clean up the spilled tea. Machine picks up (Camera on machine)
MACHINE
You’ve reached Mark and Jen. We are not hear right now so please leave your message after the beep. Mark beeps. Jen says Mark. Both laugh Machine cuts off.
MAN
Jen this is your father. I am calling to see how you are doing. I have everything set up for you and Mark to fly up this weekend to stay with us in the summer house. Well call me back when you get in. I love you.
Cut back to Jen finishing cleaning up spill. Walks down the hall into bathroom closes door. Cut to door opening light being turned off. Jen walking down to the bedroom and cut to her walking in the bedroom. (Cut) Getting into bed. Looks at Mark’s side of bed. Turning out light.
FADE TO BLACK.
SCENE TWO “MORNING OF”
Morning. Jen wakes up and looks at Mark’s side of bed that is empty but sheets messed up and slept in.
CUT TO Mark in Office looking at his calender with Today’s date circled. Friday Written in red 1 year anniversary.
Phone rings. Rings again. Mark is still looking down at the calender. He answers.
MARK
Mark Towers.
JOHN
Mark it’s John.
MARK
Hey John. What can I do for you?
JOHN
Tonight’s the big night. Are you ready?
MARK
I was just thinking of all I have been through.
Flash Back to Mark and Janette. Getting in to a cab.
JANETTE
Trust me this is going to be great.
MARK
I hope so.
DISSOLVE TO:CAB PULLING UP IN FRONT OF BUILDING MARK AND JANETTE GETTING OUT.
THEY ARRIVE IN FRONT OF A NORMAL BUILDING WITH NO DISTINGUISHING MARKS.
JANETTE
It’s just in here.
CUT TO:MARK AND JANETTE ENTERING FROM THE OUTSIDE AND CLOSING THE DOOR.
They walk up a set of stairs and arrive at a door marked with the numbers 117
JANETTE (CONT’D)
We are here.
MARK
What is this place?
JANETTE
Trust me.
MARK
I trust you
Woman opens the door and they enter and close the door behind them. Camera stays on room number.
BACK TO : PHONE CALL
JOHN
Mark you there?
MARK
Sorry. I am here
JOHN
So are you ready?
MARK
Yea I am going to leave here in 15 minuets.
JOHN
Great.

Hang’s up phone. Stairs down at calendar again. Meet with John shows for Thursday at 6 P.M.
CLOSE UP OF THURSDAY THEN FLASHBACK TO THURSDAY

In office with Mark reading the Thursdays paper Zoom out from close up of date on paper. Hangs up phone. Goes out of office. Same cut as before with Jen hanging up.
JOHN (CONT’D)
Are you ready?
MARK
Let’s go.

Cut to the main door in the lobby Mark and John exit building. Hail a cab. Cut To them leaving the cab at same building as Mark and Janette were at.
MARK (CONT’D)
This is the place.
JOHN
Let me make a quick call.
MARK
OK I will wait here.
JOHN
I love you (Hangs up phone)
Walks over to Mark
JOHN (CONT’D)
What is this place?
MARK
Trust me.
JOHN
I trust you.
They walk up stairs in the same fashions as when Mark and Janette walked up.
They get to the door 117 and both enter. Then cut to them exiting the room.
MARK
Do you think this is a good idea.
JOHN
She will never know.
MARK
I feel like all this sneaking around is starting to get to me.
JOHN
It will all be over soon. I as well can use a good rest. Have not been home much these days. That really is a great place.
MARK
I owe it all to her.
JOHN
I will be sure to thank her after.
MARK
We should be getting home its almost 1 A.M.
Hail a cab and get in.
Flashback ends with -Phone rings in office.
MARK (CONT’D)
Hello
JANETTE
Hello, I am on my way to pick her up now. I will see you there.
MARK
I am leaving now as well.
JANETTE
Good luck honey.
MARK
Thanks.
Hangs up phone and puts on jacket and goes out side.
Hails a cab and gets in pulls up at the same building and John is waiting out side.
JOHN
Lets get inside.
MARK
I hope she is not here yet.
JOHN
I think we made it before she is.
Cuts to Mark and John walking up to room 117 and going in side.
Cut to cab pulling up in front of building and Janette and Jen getting out of the Cab.
JANETTE
It’s just inside.
JEN
What is this place?
JANETTE
Trust me.
JEN
I trust you.
They cut to them waling in the stairs and up the stairs to room 117.
They walk in to a dark room. The lights go on and its packed with people. There is a banner that says Happy Duel Anniversary to Jen&Mark and John&Janette. Both Jen and Janette have surprised expressions.

Runs up to Mark and hugs him.
JOHN
Janette I wanted to surprise you and renew our wedding vowels after the best twenty years of my life.
JANETTE
Oh John of course I will.
They kiss. Cut to mark and Jen separating from their hug.
JEN
All the nights you could not come home.
MARK
What did you think I was doing?
JEN
And my dad not coming home.
MARK
What did you think he was doing?
JEN
I love you Mark.
MARK
Happy anniversary Jen.
Cut to wide shot of the two couples facing the front of the crowd. With champaign glass raised and people cheering.
FADE TO BLACK.
THE END.

The names will or might changes not sure about them..

I'm not sure if you were going for a twist, but the end is expected.

It's written well for the most part. I guess it'd depend on how it's filmed.

Good job, though.

Tyler

Yea When you read it You can tell the twist but when I film it you wont know who the parents are till you see them in the end. The phone convo will only be one sided camera so you dont see them only jen. Yea I will shoot it to be a bit mystrey like.
Thanks,
I am glad you liked it
sean