Well, it's a christmas zombie movie as you can see and its maybe a little too much like Shaun of the Dead with christmas lights thrown all over it. Now, can you tell me what you think I can do in the future part of the script in the way of plots, themes, and just the style of it all.

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"CHRISTMAS NIGHT OF THE LIVING DEAD"

FADE IN:

THE GATES LIVING ROOM

HARRY GATES, age 7, runs into the living room excitedly. The room is full of decorations, a blazing fire in the fireplace, and a tree.

HARRY
(Singing)
It’s Christmas!!

Harry checks around and finds the Christmas tree lined with presents. His mom and dad sit on the couch with there arms around each other.

HARRY
Mom! Dad!

Harry’s dad flicks on the TV as Harry begins shaking presents to hear what’s inside. His parents are watching the TV as he does this and a news report strikes there attention.

NEWSMAN (V.O.)
In what seems like a scene from a movie the bodies at Creekwood Cemetery seemed to have been risen from the dead. Whether this is a strange prank or the real thing is unknown but for now a warning is still in effect. Stick with Channel 7 for…
Harry’s mom flicks off the TV a little scared and the two parents look at each other questioningly. Just than there door bursts open. His dad peeks around the corner to see who it is. A zombie is coming! They are frightened and move to the farthest wall. Harry’s dad looks around.

DAD
What do we have in the living room to kill a zombie?

MOM
We got Harry a Nerf gun.

HARRY
Cool, you got me a Nerf gun!?

DAD
(Thinking)
No, Nerf’s not going to help.

HARRY
Did you get me a transformer?

MOM
Ummm, I got you a new suitcase. Maybe we can hit him with that.

DAD
Oh, I got you… no wait; I want it to be a surprise. Just open some gifts.

MOM
Well what am I looking for?

They all begin frantically opening packages.

DAD
Something to kill a zombie with.
MOM
Just tell me, honey.

Harry opens all his presents excitedly.

HARRY
Cool!

DAD
Well you’re going to find it eventually.

MOM
What does it feel like?

DAD
I don’t know, a little heavy I guess?

HARRY
You got her knives?

Harry’s dad smiles at mom.

MOM
Oh thank you honey.

DAD
It took ages to find ‘em.

MOM
I’m going to open them now.

The zombie knocks into something and they notice it once again. Harry’s mom quickly pulls open the box, takes out a knife, and strikes the zombie.

Than the logo appears, a white background fades behind it and it pans down from the white overcast sky.

ok - i assume you KNOW this is horribly cliched and unbelievably corny. as long as you know that and meant for it to be that way i love it, just for its sheer silliness. it would make a hilarious short or even a tv commercial if the acting was good enough that the situation felt real.

Yeah, I absolutely know that its cliche... its meant to be that way and the movies supposed to be a bit stupid funny. The newsreport thing is so overused and thats exactly why I used it. Maybe I should use some indications that its cliche (as if that title isnt evidence enough).

Also, I want to film it before thanksgiving so I can present it on my site as a teaser. Its basically setting up the silly and odd attitude of the rest of the movie.

go for it

i think its perfect the way it is - you don't need to make it more clear its supposed to be silly as long as the acting is good. bad acting and it will seem like a bad made for PAX movie - good acting and it'll rock.

ah, makes good sense to me... ill make sure to pay close attention to who I cast! Thanks for all your help. BlkMamba out.