'A young woman’s violent nightmares slowly reveal the truth of her mother’s murder, and the man with the most to lose, her father, uses his Washington influence to hunt her down.'
I'm assuming that's your logline and you're just wanting us to crtique it.
So I think it's good but I think the part "and the man with the most to lose, her father" reveals a bit too much. You clould almost go with just "A young woman’s violent nightmares slowly reveal the truth of her mother’s murder"
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