so this is the idea, a twenty minute short one act. something pretty simple. along the lines of this...

now before you read think, great dialouge, black and white film, homage to the great horror films of our age. i.e the texas chainsaw massacre, psycho.

http://www.tannershay.net/img.pdf

any help would be great!
most likely some kind of messy killings!

maybe some really good dialouge too.. i dont know...

any help would rock!

Alright, was this the script...or...what? I mean, I actually think it's cool. I can see the whole sequence with the girl in the bathroom and the torture sequence going on outside. Are you going to show it? I mean, I would think it'd be a lot cooler with just seeing her reaction to listening to her boyfriend screaming. Oh my God, it's so exciting, I hope you post it. I mean, not showing it would be even more horrifying, I think. The audience can only imagne going on. I sort of see a Shelly Duvalle screaming to the axe but with your film I see a tight CU of the lady screaming as she hears her lover screaming, the murderer laughing, and blooding splattering in the doorway. With that said, work on the script. But i don't think that's the script, is it? It's more of an idea. Anyway, I thinks it's a grrrreat idea. Good luck.

its just a small treatment

and yes, not showing its way more horrifying! thats the concept for sure man!

i guess no one really has any good sheeit to add?