http://www.marlontorres.com/films/leonardo.htm

Good effort for a first short Marlon (i am guessing it is because it is the only one on your site? Is it?), you should put it up on the site. Only criticism is the music and flow of the short gave me the feeling it was leading to something a little more than the end afforded. I was actually a lot more impressed by everything else on your site, great stuff! Good luck and looking forward to more from you.

yes, it is my first short

That was beautiful. Same as above, the film ended rather abruptly considering the music and the flow. However, your sepia cinematography was absloultely beautiful, and your dissolve transitions were excelent. Simple yet sweet.

You should submit it to studentfilms.com! It will get more of an audience and you can get valuable feedback about it. Plus, we kind of discourage linking to movies off the site. It's kind of defeating the purpose of the site.

But welcome to sf! if you need anything, feel free to contact me.

Yeah, welcome to the site. Nice flick, I loved the opening sequence. Send it to the site - it'll get my review.

Its was very good...
But.. well, what does it have to do whit leonardo?
The opening was very nice, but when it ended i realy was thinking "ehm.. why a opening of pictures from leonardo da vinci? in a movie about a boy that makes a drawing?"

I meen, i get the link about drawing, but more than that i dont see any links about the two?

So i liked it, but i dont get the story?
maybe you can explain me?
But the image itself was great, and the music also!

This was great.

Nice colorgrading, nice score (although, as said, you should have faded the music out at the end or something like that). I like the motion effects when running up the stairs. Good editing.

Simple yet effective. And no the intro isn't that obvious but the intro worked, and it did very well in my eyes. With that intro people will take a look...

So great job done there,..

holy sh*t you got some drawing skills, good movie too, the cinematography was excellent. dude you gotta teach me how to draw story boards like that. You could make a damn good comic book artist/director one day. Keep up the good work and submit some films.

I liked it a lot, the cinematography was awesome, as were the transitions. The concept was so simple, but so powerful. Nice job. Send it to the site!

What music what that in the short? I really hope its not your own original stuff, because if it is, I will feel really bad about myself.

For some reason I cannot view the film. Sometimes it will play about 3 seconds of audio, but then it stops and just sits there doing nothing. Is there anything I can do to see it?

nevermind this first part, i was confused. anyway


marlon torres, the way you put the shots together and edited them to the music was great. it was a simple story, simple conclusion, and it was sweet. these are all the good elements of a short.

i can see the connection you're trying to make between this boy and leonardo, but those titles are really really long and don't add so much to it. perhaps leonardo wouldn't be the best artist to choose for this project, since DaVinci's drawings were more scientific and academic studies.

perfhaps if you studied more artists you would find other artists that drew out of their love for a certain person more than trying to be academic or highly detailed in their drawings.

for example, Chagall or Gaugin put a lot of emotion, love, meaning behind their paintings, and they didn't worry so much about representing things realistically or how they should look, because to them, everything we see is colored through emotion.

i think that's what you were trying to say with the kid, that eventhough he's not a greast artist, atleast he has the heart behind his drawing. try making an opening sequence with other artists taht also put their heart into their work instead of being mathematical like DaVinci.

i think that would work better, and really push the idea that expressing yourself is something that lasts through the ages.

i really really liked that. the pace was dead on. the simplicity is really well done. i especially enjoyed those overhead shots.