Hi All,

I have my recently completed short, Dehydration, up on my web site, at www.krpdesign.com. (In the film section)

I would really appreciate any honest feedback and/or criticism.

thanks in advance,
kevin

While it is not strictly outlawed, we DO frown upon linking to movies on other sites. So, I'll let it slide this time, but try not to make it a habit. If you send it in to studentfilms.com, your film will get more exposure and will get better feedback too. Think about it! It's cheap too!

The title sequence is WAY too long for a 6 minute film as is the actual title.

Bartender is annoying/over acted and is resting his hand on a beer tap afer he says he doesnt have beer.


It wont load past the point where he says 'its about a girl who is a writer'

i can't believe i actually saw the whole thing. It was pointless and a waste of dv's tapes.

As pointless as anything seems, it is always possible to find positive points in anything.

I disagree with your statement, Fabvian.

Here's my input: the first thought I had was
"This looks pretty slick." The titles looked very crisp and professional, in my opinion.

I liked the use of black and white for the renactment of the story, and thought it was clever how we never saw her face for the majority of movie, it gave a little more sense of mystery. the music was subtle, had a nice style and did what it had to do. The editing and sound was pretty much seemless, so some good stuff on the technical side.

Some of the things that bothered me though was the constant repetetive inflection in Scott Elza's voice. It made the story seem a little too bland. Also, I think I heard the glasses hitting the bar a few too many times. I get the idea that he was drinking a lot... it just got irritating for some reason.

Also, I did not feel much sympathy for this customer. Nor did I care much about the bartender. They both seemed a little too bland and shallow, as if they were told to get in front of the camera at the last second. That made it difficult to fully enjoy everything they were saying.

That's about it!